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even though some people do not apparently behave raci *** against other race
they might have a subconscious mind that people with different skin colour from theirs is inferior. people who do not turn to be racist because they are much mature and tolarent than those racist.
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even though most cases of raci *** in the world are against blacks because their geic country ----Africa is fall behind in turn of economy and as well as civilization and suffer from poverty
every race will have bias toward other race at some level.
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for instance
some hong kong people will have raci *** against caucasian that called them [ghost man] regardless of their strength economic background. the consequences of raci *** can be very serious in terms of race war. Also
it will interrupt the international interchange of culture.
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So raci *** causes loss to human. To end raci ***
the society should promote equal opportuities and the ernment should strengthen the law of equlity.
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Youngsters should be taught more about civil education. the ernment should also introduce youngsters to more foreign arts and culture
to improve relations with foreign countries.
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More cultural exchanges beeen youngsters from world could help them to learn about the culture of other countries. the ernment should also help to improve the social status of foreign residents in their own countries.
Sure 图片参考:.yimg/i/icon/16/1 我尽量会唔改用字
只改 grammatical mistakes and usage 因为太长唔可能每个更改都解释 唔明的话可告u4723我 Raci *** can be found anywhere around the world
no matter in developed or developing countries. Raci *** is so mon that it could even be found in hong kong
many (or some?) people discrimate against immigrants 移民 from other Asian countries
for instance immigrants from India. Regardless the edcational level of the racist
it is nature for human/people to isolate those who are considered as dissimilar
since they dress differently
and they also have different colors of skin and facial features. Even though some people do not show raci *** against other races on the surface
they still have subconscious mind that people with different skin colour is inferior. The reason for those who do not join the racist is because they are have a more mature mind and have higher tolarence than those who are racist. Most cases of raci *** in the world are against the black race because their geic country - Africa
falls behind from other countries in terms of economy as well as civilization
and they suffer from poverty and hunger. In face every races have a certain level of bias towards other races. For instance
some Hong Kong people discriminate against the white race by giving them unpolite nicknames regardless of their strong economic background. Consequences from raci *** can be very serious in terms of racial wars
it also interrupts the exchange of cultures on a international scale. So you can see how raci *** causes losses to human. To put an end in raci ***
our society should educates its citizens about equal opportuities
and the ernment should also establishes and strengthenes laws on equlity. More civil education should be provided for youngsters. By participating in more cultural exchanges programmes
youngsters can learn more about the culture of other countries. The ernment can help by introducing youngsters to more foreign cultures and arts
and to improve the relationships with foreign countries
on the other hand
the ernment should help improving the social status of immigrants.
参考: MYSELF
(raci *** Raci *** ) happens everywhere in world
(no matter--) in developed (orand) developing countries (+alike). (raci *** It) is so mon that (+
) even in (hong kongHong Kong)
many people (will--) discrimate against residents who came from other (asiaAsian) countries
for instance
(indiaIndia). (XXX I don't understand why you need to single out India as an example here. The story that follows does not mention anything about Indi.) (regardless of the fact thatWhether) those racist are well-edcated or not (XXX This sentence does not seem to fit in as it does not have any correlation to the next sentence)
it is (the--) human nature (+of ourselves) (XXX You need a subject here -- human nature is a concept and cannot take on an action verb like isolate) to isolate people who (are considered "werid" since they--) dress differently (from us--) (andor) have different skin colour and (+facial) features. (XXX If you believe that it is human nature to isolate people who dress differently
then there would be no racists. Your argument is very weak here.) (evenEven) though some people do not apparently (behavepractise) raci *** against (other racepeople of a different race)
they (XXX Does the they refer to some people or other people?) might (have a subconscious mindsubconsciously think) that people with (+a) different skin colour (from theirs--) (isare) inferior. (peoplePeople) who do not turn to be (racist/racists) (because they--) are much mature and (tolarenttolerant) than (those racistracists). (XXX This argument is also very weak.) (evenEven) though most cases of raci *** in the world are against (blacksthe Blacks) (XXX Using this world alone can make you a racist... be careful) because (+of) their (geic countryancestry) ----Africa (is fallfalls) behind (XXX the western countries?) in (turnterms) of economy and as well as civilization (XXX this is another racist statement... be careful) and suffer from poverty (XXX this is another generalization)
every race will have bias (towardagainst) (XXX bias towards = to be in favour of!) (otheranother) race at some level. (forFor) instance
some (hong kongHong Kong) people will have raci *** against (caucasianCaucasi) (that calledby calling) them [ghost man] regardless of their strength economic background (XXX Are you suggesting that raci *** is always against the poor? We're talking about raci ***
which is purely based on race
right?). (theThe) consequences of raci *** can be very serious in terms of race war (XXX What is a race war?). Also
it will interrupt the international interchange of culture. (XXX Unless everyone practise raci ***
I don't see how raci *** can have an interruption. And
what do you mean by interchange of culture?) So raci *** causes loss to human. (XXX ?) To end raci ***
(the societysocieties) should promote equal opportuities and the ernment should strengthen the law of (equlityequality). (XXX How would promoting equal opportunities end raci *** ?) Youngsters should be taught more about civil education. (the ernmentGovernments) (XXX Since you are not talking about a specific ernment
you should use a plural noun to express generality.) should also introduce youngsters to more foreign arts and culture
to improve relations with foreign countries. (XXX How can a ernment unilaterally improve relations with foreign countries?) More cultural exchanges (beeenamong) youngsters (from world--) could help them (to--) learn about (the culturecultures) of other countries. (the ernmentGovernments) should also help to improve the social status of foreign residents in their own countries. (XXX Huh?) Remember that there is no E in grammar!
there are some mistakes in the correction given to you by the other responder for example
unpolite is not a word the correct form should be impolite if you're interested
a good tool for improving writing (in general) is writeright.wetpaint