- cloudcone
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可怜天下父母心,我来帮你翻译试试:My best love—the piano
Remember the first time I heard the piano that I was deeply attracted by the beautiful melody .From then on, I was eager to learn the piano from day to day. At last,with the support and encouragement of my parent I started learning to play the piano.Until now I have been studying for 6 years.From the very beginning all thumbs until I was able to pop up beautiful melody now.I paid more efforts than children of the same age.When the children playing outside, I sat in front of the piano practiced again and again, but I did not feel bitter and tired, and get the happiness.Everything comes to him who waits,I was intended to apply for the 8th grade level qualificationin in piano performance this year the end of July.
From piano competition,I won the excellent grades and Increased my confidence.The piano not only makes me get the joy of success, but also cultivates my sentiment. I believe there is always a rainbow after the rain,so I insisted, I believe I will see the most beautiful rainbow after the rain.
Thank you all. Thank you all of the judges!
- 苏州马小云
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My top love -- the piano
I still remember the first time I heard the piano. I was deeply attracted by the beautiful melody. From then on, I was eager to study playing piano. Finally, with the support and encouragement by my parents, I began to study playing piano, for 6 years till now. Initially my fingers were awkward and not fluent, but now I can play beautiful melodies. I made more efforts than peer children. When the children were playing outside, I sat in front of the piano and practised again and again. However, I didn"t think it hard and boring, but did feel happy from it. Hard work pays back finally. (此处似乎少了一句,比如我目前取得了很大进步,之类的)I am preparing the exam for Level 8 for Piano this July.
The excellent performance in the piano competitions also made my confidence increased. The piano not only brings me happyness of success, but also cultivates my sentiment. I do believe a rainbow will appear after rain, Thus, I keep on my steps because I believe that I can definitely see the most beautiful rainbow after the rain!
Thank you everyone. Thank you for the judges!
- 里论外几
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I most love(改为水纹纹翻译的What I love the most )-- the piano
(如果说是演讲稿,不应该写得过于书面化,要口语化。)
(还要加上HELLO EVERY ONE这一类的开场白,不能一上来就将主题)
Remember the first time I heard the piano, I was the beautiful melody deeply attracted. (改为When the first time I heard the beautiful melody of the piano,I was deeply attracted by this.)I yearn day and night to learn the piano. The ultimate in mom and dad"s support and encouragement I began to learn to play the piano. I have been studying for six years, from the initial fingers stiff, not skilled to pop-up beautiful melody now, I paid more efforts than children age. (改为水纹蚊的At first, my fingers were tense and not skillful, but now I can play beautiful melody. I"ve put more effort to it than other kids of my age.)When the kids(were,可省略) playing in (改为outside)the window, I sat in front of the piano and practice again and again,(改为.) but I didn"t feel bitter and tired, but get happy. (逗号太多。改为Though I felt tired,I was excited that I learnt a new song.)Hard work pays off at the end of the seven year I intend to apply for Piano eight.(改为As an old saying says,"Success belongs to the persvering",and I am gonging to apply for the Piano Test of Level Eight in the end of July. )
Access to the excellent results also increased my confidence in the piano competition, the piano is not only I have the joy of success(要倒装), but also cultivate my sentiments. I believe there is a rainbow after the rain, so I insisted, because I believe that I will see the beautiful rainbow after the rain!(重复)
Thank you. Thank you for the judges!(裁判在这里用的很怪,换成评审团好一些)
- 黑桃云
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我的最爱——钢琴
记得我第一次听钢琴,我美丽的旋律深深吸引。我朝思暮想的学钢琴。最终在爸爸妈妈的支持和鼓励,我开始学习弹钢琴。我已经学了六年,从最初的手指僵硬,不熟练的弹出美妙的旋律,我付出了更多的努力比孩子年龄。当孩子玩在窗户上,我坐在钢琴前,反复练习,但我不觉得苦和累,但得到的快乐。勤奋的回报在七年末我打算申请钢琴八。
获得了优异成绩也增加了我的钢琴比赛钢琴的信心,不仅是我成功的喜悦,也陶冶了我的情操。我相信这雨后的彩虹,所以我坚持,因为我相信我会看到雨后彩虹的美丽!
谢谢你.谢谢你,法官!
- 小菜G
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My favorite -- the piano I always remember when I first heard the piano music, I was deeply attracted by its beautiful melody. From then on, day and night I was having a strong eager to learn it. And I finally started learning under my parents " support and encouragement. I have been studying for six years, from the initial fingers stiff and not skilled to pop-up beautiful melody now, I paid more efforts than other people of my age. When other kids playing in the window, I was sitting in front of the piano and practicing again and again, but I felt happy instead of bitterness and tiresomeness. Hard-working pays , I am preparing for the exam of 8 grade of piano in the late July this year.
The good performance that I got from the piano competition also increased my confidence. the piano is not only bring me joy of success, but also cultivate my sentiments. I believe there is a rainbow after the rain, so I keep insisting, because I believe that I will see the beautiful rainbow after the rain! Thank you. Thank you for your time!
- tt白
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绝对是最地道的英语哈
没有语病的
求采纳
What I love the most --- Piano
I remember the first time I listened to a piano music. I was deeply attracted by the beautiful melody. Since then, I have been dying to learn how to play the piano. Finally, with the support of my parents, I started to learn how to play it.
Until now, I have been studying for six years. At first, my fingers were tense and not skillful, but now I can play beautiful melody. I"ve put more effort to it than other kids of my age. When they are playing outside, I"m sitting in front of the piano practicing again and again. I haven"t felt tired or bored, instead, I feel very happy.
In the end, it"s all worthwhile; I have got good grades in a piano competition. I"m going to sign up for the Piano Test of Level Eight.
The piano competition has not only proved my ability, but also gained my confidence. The piano has given me so much more than just happiness of success, but also cultivated my taste. I believe even a dark cloud has a silver lining. So I hold on to my dreams, because I believe there will always be a rainbow after the rain.
Thank you for listening, Ladies and gentlemen. Thank you!
- max笔记
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My favorite - the piano
Remember the first time I heard piano music, I was deeply attracted by the beautiful melody. From then on, I yearn to learn the piano. Finally in mom and dad"s support and encouragement I started learning to play the piano. Until now I have to study for 6 years, from the initial fingers stiff, not good at now can pop-up beautiful melody melody, I paid more efforts than the same age children. When the children playing in the window, I sat in front of the piano practice again and again, but I did not feel bitter and tired, but get the happiness. Everything comes to him who waits I am ready to enter oneself for an examination the piano 8 this year the end of July.
Obtained the excellent result from the piano competition has increased my confidence, I got into a piano is not only
- meira
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80.5分
评语:
文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用学术词汇就更好了;作者有一定功底,可在平时练习中增加长难句的记忆;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用。
- 北有云溪
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英语中不能用破折号,应该为逗号
其他都没啥大的语病
- nicehost
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我想问一下,这是要讲出来的, 还是要谢谢写出来的
- CarieVinne
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my best love .....很多错误,你这是神马英语
- 苏萦
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错多了,去问问老师吧