挑错.1.it is most important to keep my heart pleasure.2I avoid

没错啊 很通俗

Dear Family:
Firstly thank you for being my another foreign family for one year.
Maybe I will make some mistakes these days,but I will correct my problem and keep my good habits.Okey,I will describe me myself.
You know I'm a chinese girl, born in a cultural family,I have my own dream,and my parents have the same one for me.
I want to learn languages,also I love learning languages.I have learned English for nearly 9 years.
My parents have taught me English since I was a child.
I hope I can speak English as easy as my mother speaking Chinese.
I can think something in English.
I'm a confident girl.I learned piano when I was 5 years old.
I won some competition before with my hard work.
I love music very much.It's a key part of my life.
I cannot be away from it.As the matter of fact,I'm a thankful girl.
My family is not so rich,but they give me this chance to improve me myself ,to do the job for my future.
At the same time of saying thanks to you,I must say thanks to my parents.
For me,they have done so many things.
So I won't be sorry to them.I will work hard.
For my future.also of cause for them.
You know I'm the only one child in my family.
The teacher told me I seem to have a brother or sister in my family.
He thought that I would have a brother or sister because I am so young.
You know it's lonely when I stay at home by myself.
I don't know whom I can talk to,just get together with my computer or some novels.
I always look far away from the window.
I could always look a couple of twins.
They are so cute.
The most improtant is that they can play with each other,talk to each other.
Maybe I'm also looking foward to that kind of life.
It seems that every child who born in China would like the style of life.
But if I won't,it's okey so.
I know I will stay with your family for ten months.
I'm thinking about how to be one of your family member.
I always do housework at my home.
So,I can do some basic work by myself.
I like cooking.
In fact,I'm not good at it.
I always help my mom to cook.
Maybe I can do some simple cooking.
Also,the teacher told me maybe the family will have a garden.
I'm so suprised about this.
You know I live in an apartment for many years.
We just have a public garden in our communition.
It's not mine.
I like flowers and grass.
Maybe I also can help you to do some simple things to make your garden more beautiful.
Ten months are not so long,but this is the first time to leave my parents for so long a time.
Maybe I will cry coz I miss them.
Please forgive my tears.
I'm looking foward the life in the new family,the new mom,new dad and maybe also the new brother or sister.
Just thank you.
See you soon.

1.few issues 应该与 issues 类比,而不是一堆问题和一个问题类比,所以that变成those
2.had swum.这些不规则变化看起来很简单,可是做的时候很容易忽略.要小心.我记得OG里还有一道是HAD ROSE 改成 HAD RAISEN,不知道你做到了没有
3.different是修饰前面动词learning的,没有错.这题是介词用错,as变成in.result as翻成中文也行不通.其实different很好判断,这一句的动词是promotes,所以learning必须是宾语,也就是一个名词,那么different就必须是这个名词的修饰成分,也就是必须是形容词而不是副词.
我5月刚考了SAT,马上要出分了,祈福~
加油!

第一个the most改成a most
a most表示“很”
the most表示“最”
第三课是很难的一课,但它并不是第四册里最难的.

1.Her hair is longer than Amy's.
2.My legs are shorter than my father's

I dont't know why so many people like them very.
首先don't写错了,very也不能放在句尾,应该去掉
Or maybe i just can't enjoy their music...
I大写,其他没错,但觉得不太通顺,如果你想说"或许我只是不懂得欣赏他们的音乐",你可以说maybe I don't know how to appreciate their music 更好一些
One of my friend told me that he love this band very much.
应该是one of my friends,told为过去式,后面时态一致应为loved
Then I seach sth about them and I found many people love their music!
搜索是search 不是seach,整句话时态都不清楚,前面search是一般现在时,后面found是过去式,再后面love又为现在时,应统一.
So I want to know why.
这句对了
I listened some songs of them tonight.
应该是listened to
I try to find some songs I like!
应该是tried
But I couldn't .To be honest,I don't like that kind of music very much.
To be honest?你是不是想说"说句实话",那应该表达为 In fact,后面用very much不妥,最好说I don't like that kind of music at all,我一点也不喜欢那种音乐.
They're not sounds bad but I just don't like.
这里错了,应该是they don't sound bad,而不应该用被动
Maybe I'm opinionated because I just heard a few songs of them.
也许我自以为是因为我只听了一点,heard应该改成listened to,一点点应该是few而不是a few.
Maybe I'm not have a right of comment because I nearly don't understand music.
应该是I don't have a right comment,后面对了
I'll listen more music of them and then maybe I'll like their music because of knowing them.
listen后面加to,后面没有语法错误
Do not make a comment too fast before you know it,I think.
没错
我觉得你的英语表达能力应该注意训练啊,虽然有些看起来是对的,但是读起来很不通顺,应该避免写成中国式英语,希望你继续努力.

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tigers
camels
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Mary is mother is work in a hospital now.
改为 Mary ’s mother is work in a hospital now.Listen!
Listen!Lily piaying the piano there now .
改为
Listen!Lily is piaying the piano there now .

Asbestosis has slightly risen between the years of
1968 and 1996, however, there is a more massive increase in （the）mesotheliomia which is a more advanced type of asbestosis. Atopic dermatitis is a chronic inflammatory disease also known as atopic eczema. It could be caused from
families（family名词作定语,应为单数）history as well as the chemicals in the work place. It usually affects
those that （that应该换成who）are exposed to chemicals in the work place, for example hairdressers and mechanics. However ,atopic dermatitis is 缺少the most common to families with
hypersensitivity of skin to the substances in the environment. Atopic dermatitis
has a variety of biological effects. It could cause the autonomic nervous
system to be irregular, and the immunodeficiency of cells to decrease. The
physiological effects are a variety of skin maladies, such as dry and rough
skin. These skin alterations can （can去掉）prove to be uncomfortable and painful for some people. However there is no cure for the disease（可不可以换成it） but, there are a variety of therapies that can improve a person’s symptoms. There is basic dermatological therapy that uses oils for the treatment of dry skin to help ease the scratching and anti-inflammatory therapy which helps（去掉这两个词换成helping,做结果状语） to control the disease (IPCS,1999).
Industrial disease can be found in different forms.
Asbestosis, pneumoconiosis and atopic dermatitis, are （the）only three examples of
the many occupational diseases 缺少复数that can have long term health effects on a
person’s life. Unfortunately most of these diseases are incurable and cause a
considerable amount of deaths. Now the worldly population are more （比较级）aware of
industrial diseases. A variety of things (换成measures are being taken )are being done to prevent them, for example (such as )using less of the dangerous materials, and reducing jobs that expose
people to dangerous gases and chemicals. These diseases are being monitored and strategies are (being)undertaken to prevent them, but there has to be去掉constant 这里少一个空格vigilance of harmful factors in the workplace must be strenthened这是增加的斗胆改了,用词重复较多,不知怎么样,感谢给与机会

She's starting taking driving lesson
be+Ving

Have you got any money. Doesn't mean you are successful挑错
第一种改法:
It doesn't mean you are successful even if you have got lots of money!
第二种改法:
That you have got lots of money doesn't mean you are successful!